caticonslite_bm_altTINSEL TALES RESULTS – CHRISTMAS BOX 1970 HITS THE SPOT!

Our annual Tinsel Tales contest for a short piece of fiction attracted quite a diverse range of entries with all of them having something to offer.

The main problem with those which didn’t make the shortlist was either a weak story line or loose writing.  Short fiction, in this case just 250 words really needs to be very tight with every word counting.  Several entries would have fared much better if their authors had spent more time pruning their work and developing the plot before submitting.

A good way of checking if your story has impact is to read it aloud to a group of friends and note their reaction.  A continued stare of expectancy will tell you that something isn’t working.

From a shortlist of Christmas Count Down by Valerie Robinson, Unspoken Knowledge by Patricia Barnard, Christmas Box 1970 by Anne Graham and Space by Geraldine Stoneham the eventual winner was Christmas Box 1970.

This story managed to convey so much about the protagonist and her world without resorting to any complex detail.  It perfectly matched the theme of the contest and left the reader with a nice warm, festive glow.

Snapping at its heels was Christmas Count Down.  This was a lot of fun and suitably seasonal.  Unspoken Knowledge had a lovely atmospheric beginning which would have made this a more challenging contender for the top spot had a stronger ending been contrived.  Space was another excellent effort and begs to be worked up into a longer story which could do well in the women’s magazine market.

Well done everyone!

Read all entries including the winner.

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caticonslite_bm_altCount Down

‘‘Ok, here we go….carrots for Rudolph?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Low-alcohol sherry for Santa?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Mince pie in case he’s hungry? And it’ll help mop up if he’s already been at the brandy. ’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘The kids’ stockings filled?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Nothing explosive inside them this time?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Turkey fully defrosted?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Indigestion tablets and botulism cure? Aunt Ethel’s face still haunts me.’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Napkins folded?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘In no way resembling genitalia? The vicar might call.’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Sprouts peeled ready for that funny criss-cross to be cut into the tops with a sharp knife?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Bandages?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Just enough beer in for Uncle Jimmy? You know how he gets.’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Spare bed and valium for Aunt Daphne? Better safe than sorry. ’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Christmas cake decorated with a tiny wooden house and miscellaneous animals?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘And you’ve told everyone they’re for decoration only? I barely got Henry to hospital in time.’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Balloons ready for Grandpa to twist into amusing shapes? And the same goes for them as went for the napkins.’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Extra sellotape and wrapping paper? Remember what happened when we had to use superglue.’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Wreath hung securely on the door? We don’t want the postman injured again.’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Tree lights working?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Totally fireproof, this time?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Reindeer positioned on the lawn?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Not flashing or making that weird buzzing noise?’’

‘‘Check.’’

‘‘Then that’s it! Have a happy, peaceful Christmas, darling.’’

‘‘Check!’’

‘‘Have you been putting gin in your tea?’’

‘’Cheek. I mean, check….’’

 

‘‘Got any left?’’

 

 

 

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Last Stand at the Okay Corral

Chuck held his fire until the Indians were close then pulled the trigger of his carbine. Braves tumbled from their horses under his deadly aim. ‘Make every bullet count,’ he ordered the young girl by his side.

 

Sheila fired, her own colt cracking its message of death. The fighting was fierce until the attackers turned their horses and galloped away. ‘What happens now?’ She drank from a bottle of water and passed it to her companion.

 

‘Reckon they’ll come again,’ drawled Chuck. He smiled at the girl. ‘But we’ve plenty of ammo, and I’m the best Injun fighter round here.’

 

They watched the war party line up and charge, their whoops loud and menacing, but Chuck held his fire until they were very close, and many attackers were dropped.

 

‘Chuck, I can hear a loud noise in the distance.’

 

‘Sounds like a lot of horses coming our way,’ said Chuck, and grinned. ‘I know General Custer is in this area. Bet he’s heard the firing.’

 

Right ‘ Chuck’ Billy and Sheila. Can you please halt the Indian war and come down? Christmas lunch is ready and Dad’s very hungry.’

 

‘Have you noticed something?’ said Billy, as he climbed down from the top bunk bed. ‘Mum always seems to know when we need help, and comes just in time.’

 

Sheila thought for a moment. ‘Why don’t we ask her to help us fight the Indians? Bet she’d be a good shot.’

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Leroy’s Giraffe

Leroy was the only black Santa in Croydon.

 

When he hired him Ralph said, “Since you’re from Africa, we’ll have a giraffe instead of a reindeer.”

 

Leroy sighed. He’d never been to Africa.

 

His empire was a desert oasis in the toy department. The fraying baby giraffe was harnessed to a sleigh. Customers flocked at first to see the exotic Santa but each year numbers dropped.

 

Wonder how long we’ve got, Leroy said to the giraffe. “I’m fed up with the kids being rude, anyway.”  

 

“You’re not Santa – he isn’t black,” a kid said, breaking into Leroy’s reverie.

 

“There isn’t a Santa,” another boy declared. “I saw Dad bring presents into my room.”

 

His sister’s face crumpled; she wailed. Their mother glared at Leroy.

 

“He isn’t really Santa,” the boy said.

 

Leroy opened his mouth but the mother picked up her daughter and marched off.

 

A small angelic-looking boy approached.

 

“What would you like from Santa, sonny?”

 

“I’m gonna tell Mum you touched me.”

 

“Tell her what you bloody well like, son. I’ve had enough.”

 

Tearing off his beard, Leroy stormed out of the shop.

 

Next morning he shuffled back, shoulders hunched. He froze, open-mouthed. The oasis had gone. A white Santa with reindeer and sleigh sat in a grotto with polystyrene snow and twinkling lights.

 

Ralph came up. “Sorry, mate. Management’s been saying it’s time you went. Rushing off like that yesterday settled it. Tell you what, though, you can have the giraffe.”

 

 

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caticonslite_bm_altChristmas Surprise

Ebenezer sucked on his clay pipe, watching the cortege slowly pass through the churchyard to the newly dug grave at the far end, remote from the others, concealed by bushes. Snow was falling, and he pulled his long, torn coat tightly round him, glad he had boots on his feet, even though the leather was old and cracked in places. He coughed, thinking about the man inside the ornate coffin.

‘Funny old bastard,’ mumbled Ebenezer, knowing Clive de Seer had been a recluse though extremely rich, living in a large house with two servants. A man who could both terrify, and earn the gratitude of the locals in the town.

Ebenezer was aware of the stories of witchcraft surrounding Clive, especially as he remained handsome until death in his sixty second year, with a face having the smooth features of someone thirty years younger. But he had been generous to the local church, including donating several stained glass windows. It didn’t stop the church elders decreeing he was buried well away from the other graves.

The vicar began the funeral service, watched by Clive’s servants among the few mourners. The snow was now falling thickly, and Ebenezer, feeling his age, shivered as he left the cemetery to walk to his hovel in the centre of town.

He smiled as he thought about his return that night and the rewards Clive would yield when dug up. The local hospital would give good money for such a fine specimen for dissection, and no questions. With Christmas only a couple of weeks away, the extra money would be welcome.

Ebenezer cursed and his arms ached as he dug deeper into the ground, with the soil piling high. The night was deathly dark with no moon to illuminate the violation of Clive’s grave. A lone owl hooted its presence as it hunted among the tombstones.

Thud! His spade hit the coffin. Soil was quickly removed until the whole casket was exposed, and the spade used to prise open the lid. Ebenezer leaned on his shovel and his chest hurt as he gasped for air, with sweat pouring down his face despite the cold and falling snow.

He looked at the finely clad figure of Clive, eyes closed, and arms by his side.  He looked so peaceful as though merely having a sleep, soon to be awake and active.

Ebenezer wheezed as he struggled to lift the corpse out of the coffin, then the grave. He kneeled by the graveside until his heartbeat returned to normal, and dragged Clive along the ground to a handcart nearby. Sacking covered the corpse once it had been heaved into the cart, and the old man wiped a hand across his sweating face, and coughed painfully, before returning to the grave and replacing the lid. He gradually shovelled soil until the grave was filled, then hobbled back to the handcart and grasped the two handles. ‘I’ll take you home, Sir, bed you down for the night, and have an ale or two at the Golden Fleece. Should get a goodly number of guineas for a fine specimen like you.’

The creaking cart elicited no interest from the few people out in the ill lit streets, and carriages hissed through the snow, pulled by horses whose breath steamed in the cold

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 air. Ebenezer reached his home in the slums part of town, with poorly cobbled paths and no street lighting. Lifting Clive over a shoulder, he opened the door, and deposited the still form on the floor. ‘Now you make yourself comfortable, Sir, and I’ll not be long.’

The grave robber chuckled as he weaved through the thick snow from his favourite hostelry hours later, happy, drunk, and thinking about the rewards from the night’s work. The fine clothes should bring a tidy sum once stripped from its owner before he was taken to the hospital’s dissecting room.

‘I’m home, Sir,’ he slurred, lighting a candle in its holder by the door. He tried to focus on the floor where Clive lay, and sobered quickly as he realised the corpse was gone. ‘Who’s stolen my body?’ he shouted, and the hairs on the back of his neck rose as he recognised the figure sitting in his armchair by the fireplace.

‘You’re dead, you’re bleedin’ dead,’ whispered Ebenezer, eyes popping, stomach belching, and jelly-like legs trembling.

‘Ebenezer, Ebenezer,’ said Clive, slowly rising from the chair and walking to the door. ‘Did you really think you would be allowed to take me for dissection? Have you not heard of my powers over the years? Did you think the stories were just so much tittle tattle?’

He turned his head, and Ebenezer dropped to his knees as he stared into the blazing red eyes of Clive, who smiled, and turned the door handle.

‘It is nearly Christmas, Ebenezer, and I have a surprise for you. There are those who wish to bring you tidings, but, alas, not of joy. Greet the spirits of those whom you have desecrated.’

Clive opened the door, and the bodies of corpses, dug up over the years for dissection, poured in. Ebenezer screamed once before he was torn to shreds.

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caticonslite_bm_altA Memorable Christmas Present

 ‘S’ for Sierra flew over Germany as flak burst nearby, rocking the Wellington bomber.

‘Right a bit,’ ordered the bomb aimer and John McKendrick, the pilot, checked his instruments as they closed on Bremen. The shock of an explosion nearby made him swear. A fireball illuminated the night sky, falling away in dozens of flaming pieces.

Poor sods never had a chance with a full bomb load. It could happen to us. Damn, my hands are shaking, and the sweat’s pouring down my face.

 

‘Steady, steady,’ ordered the bomb aimer ‘Bomb doors open.’

‘S’ for Sierra lurched upwards as the deadly cargo was released into the inferno below.

‘Home, guys,’ said John, and banked the bomber to head back across occupied Europe The rest of his crew were silent with their own thoughts about the mission and friends who would not be flying home that night.

 Snow was falling as they neared the aerodrome, and saw the welcoming landing lights as the Wellington touched down, skidded along the tarmac, and halted. John undid his flying helmet, turned his head and grinned at the navigator who gave a thumbs up sign, then spoke to his crew.

‘Quite a baptism for our first mission, but we’ve come home safely. No one injured, and it’s Christmas Eve. Don’t know about you boys, and I’m not normally bothered. But this year I’m going to Midnight Mass at the station church. Getting back is the best Christmas present I’ve ever had.’

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caticonslite_bm_altSilent Night, Holy Night

 
The tension grows as the clock counts down. Harry, Tom and Emma are sitting down on the floor, staring at the clock, watching the hands tick down.
 
There is a feeling in the room, but the three inhabitants cannot quite put their finger on it. They have never quite felt like this before, despite being in this position previously.
 
Several people enter the room, bringing items in and collecting items to take away.
There is a flurry of activity in this small, but bright room.
 
The clock ticks down and Harry, Tom and Emma grow more nervous. The last time this had happened, there had been a catastrophic outcome, and none of the three intrepid inhabitants want the same result. It has to be different this time; they had felt failure and now wanted to taste the fruitions of success.
 
From outside the room, lots of noise starts to emanate; a loud noise that grew and grew, making each of the group come to the realization that their time was about to come. They were about to face their fear, and they were going to face it head on. They all start to get to their feet. Harry, Tom and Emma look at each other, making sure that they are ready to face whatever presents itself to them from beyond the darkness.
 
Cautiously, Harry, Tom and Emma walk towards the bright light in the distance. Eden Forest Primary Reception Nativity performance take two has just begun.

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caticonslite_bm_altUnspoken knowledge

I called you by name, and knowingly you lifted your head. Your warm brown eyes melted me. They always do, but today I felt their warmth filling my body. You ambled towards me, your gait telling me that you enjoy your time in your stall. You needed no guidance, and today a treat of Super fodder awaited you.

 

You and your companions sensed my urgency to finish the milking. You obliged and gave a more generous yield than usual. Afterwards I left you grazing in the best pasture.

 

Then I rushed to join farmers and villagers in a birthday celebration. Together we sang several birthday songs. We sang them lustily and with great fervour. We listened with awe to a story that never ceases to captivate. Then we said thanks for everything and that we’d meet again.

 

Afterwards, family and friends celebrated further, exchanging gifts, eating and drinking. It was when we were all choc-full and in happy state that I remembered that you’d be waiting for your evening session.

 

And you were there, all of you, looking at me patiently and silently. You understood. Your forebears were unspoken teachers. They’d passed on the amazing news. You knew of the Babe in the hay and you too, had celebrated that birth today.

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caticonslite_bm_altCHRISTMAS BOX: 1970

“What are you going to do with the tips then, Jenny?” Terry asked the Saturday girl as he helped her stack towels. The extra money meant a lot in hairdressing.

“My Dad says it should see him through to New Year,” she whispered and concentrated on squaring corners.

Terry knew better than to pursue it. Some men only let daughters stay on at school if they handed over the money from their Saturday job.

“But if I had a Fairy Godmother,” the girl added, and he heard the catch in her voice, “I’d buy some white boots.”

“Attract a special somebody’s eye, would they?”

Determination surged through the girl and straightened her drooping shoulders. “No, Mr Mancini, I’d like them,” she said, “and I’ve worked hard for them.”

She had, he thought. As he began to close up the shop early that afternoon, Jenny’s dad arrived and came right in.

“Okay, there Terry,” the man blustered. “Heard the Christmas Box was bulging so I thought I’d help my girl carry her share home.”

“You needn’t have bothered. The Saturday girl only gets a percentage.”

Ignoring the outraged gasps of his staff, he handed Jenny her wages and two crumpled pound notes. Silently the girl passed them to her dad who stared at him, but left without another word.

Terry took a crisp fiver out of his pocket and gave it to Jenny.

“Make sure you wear the boots on the way home,” he said.

 

 

247 words including title

 

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caticonslite_bm_altThe Twelfth Night

Her eyes tightly closed, she willed herself back to sleep. One sheep, two sheep, three sheep….ten. No, still awake. She imagined the river waters, dropping her thoughts into them, watching them float away… but the river froze which only served to make her realise just how cold it was.

She kicked her now cold hot water bottle on to the floor and aligned her body with her husbands. Better, but it still wasn’t working. She wrapped the duvet closer around them and brought her wrists up to her nose and inhaled deeply, but the lavender scent had faded in the night, no doubt rubbed off on the duvet after countless hours of thrashing.

It was no use.

She slipped back the covers, careful not to disturb her husband and tiptoed to the window, to open the curtains and stare at the soft, familiar and somehow warming glow of the Christmas fairy lights adorning the house opposite.

Eyes stared hungrily back at her.

She yelped and shut the curtains tightly. Her imagination, no doubt, which was getting worse by the day, but her heart was pounding and she struggled to get her breathing under control.

She heard her husband stir and willed him to wake up, to protect her from her thoughts, but he just grunted and sighed deeply. The voices in her head screamed at her to go back to bed, but like the victims she had yelled at in the movies, she saw her hand reach back to the curtains.

The eyes bore into hers, now at eye level.

This time it was so dark outside, nothing but the yellows surrounding the pupils were visible. The creature was either so big it was blocking out the lights, or its continued presence was sucking all the energy from its surroundings. She wanted to run, but she couldn’t look away.

The creature’s pupils widened and all of a sudden her mind was still. For once, everything was clear. The eyes were somehow familiar. Intoxicating. Persuasive. She had to open the window.

“What are you doing?”

Her hand stopped mid air.

“It’s freezing outside, don’t let out the heat. Come back under the covers.”

She looked again out the window, but all she could see were the flickering fairy lights.

“What are you looking at? Are those kids hanging around outside the car again?”

He jumped out of the bed and gazed outside, but of course, there was no one there.

“This is the third night in a row” he said. “Next time, tell me if you can hear something before you get up, I may be able to do something about it” he chided, but he directed her to the bed, shut the curtains, then got in beside her.

With his body heat for comfort and the lingering clarity still calming her thoughts, she began to breath deeply and a few seconds later he too followed her example and slept soundly.

The eyes watched them from the gap in the curtain, unblinking.

‘Not long now,’ It thought.  ‘Three nights down, nine more to go. The twelfth night will come and with it, her soul.’

 

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